It is



liquid splendor

and darkness ebb and flow


When she woke up today

she saw threads of sunshine

slithering through bare-branches

and swore the sun was winking at her


But she knew it carried no promise

at least not for her

she was forgotten

and broken


The sun never gave her warmth

instead it carried

icy sly pry and whispers

and she blamed it for her inner scars


Hating eyes

carried sharp blades

cutting right through her soul

rendering her dull and useless


Nighttime called her dreams

they were more alive

more vivid…

and colored the dawn


She loved soaking in the ocean

it softened her skin

her heart felt




She waited impatiently

for darkness to settle in

and noises to dwindle

to draw her in

and out


She never had to feel small

nighttime was gentle



and loving


3 thoughts on “Nighttime

  1. Nice piece. To make it easier for readers, remove the spacing in between the lines of each stanza. Reading this required more scrolling than needed. Also, I would take out “impatiently” from 1st line of you 2nd to last stanza. “He waited” can makes a sufficient description with nouns, verbs and adjectives to do the heavily lifting. Did you know, adverb are rated the #1 killer of poetry listeners. True fact! Be careful with punctuation. It can add that extra touch that makes it English. Keep writing and I’ll keep reading. Look forward to reading more of your work.

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    1. Thank you so much for that insightful advice, which is an added benefit to my poetry writing. I am glad that you are interested in my writing and I sure hope that you’ll support and guide me grow. Indeed, we learn and grow everyday.


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